Source for Paper C: No-freaking policy harmful both to students, school

http://gunn3.pausd.org/oracle/web/articles/724



*Argument: What are the consequences of banning freak dancing on kids coming to school dances?  Banning freak dancing from school dances causes kids not to come because not being able to freak dance inhibits them from expressing themselves.



*Audience: school administrators.

*Goal: convince school administrators that they should not ban school dances because if no kids come to the dances, then there will be no revenue for the school.

 *Logos- One of the main persuasive elements of this paper is appealing to the logic of the audience. Using money as a factor of why they should keep the dances is a very logical thing.  It is always a struggle for school administrators to raise finances by themselves and if cutting out freak dancing cuts down the budget because kids dont come, shutting down dances isn't logical.

*Ethos: Because a student writes this article in a high school newspaper, the ethos is not that strong.  Her credibility is weakened because the audience doesn't know with what intentions she is writing the article.  She could be one of the students inappropriately freak dancing and just wants to convince the administrators so she can dance this way.  She may not have the best interest for the entire student body and teachers.

*Accurate- Because she says that the amount of profit that could come in was verified by the student activities director, this is accurate and could be enough to convince school administrators.

*Sufficient: I'm not sure how tight of a budget this school is on, but if they would struggle financially if they didn't have the revenue from the dances, this argument could be sufficient.

*Effective-  I don't know how effective this article is, because I think she loses some credibility in saying that they shouldn't take out rap music because they won't have fun if this music is cut out and saying that freaking is just part of the culture.  Parents and administrators don't always care what is part of the culture---most want what is best morally for the students.  So unless the administrators are really drawn by the money factor, I don't think the article is that effective.  If they are drawn by this, it is.

Paper A Revision

*Argument: What are the consequences of legalization of medical marijuana on dependants who can gain access to the marijuana? Legalization of medical marijuana leads to substance abuse of those who don't need it for medicinal purposes because legalization of medical marijuana allows those without chronic disease to have easier access to medical marijuana.

*Audience: Parents that are pro-legalization of medical marijuana because of an illness they have.

*Goal: convince parents that legalizing medical marijuana will lead to easier access of marijuana and ultimately to substance abuse, parents should care more about the health of their children and work to fight to get a better tablet form of medical marijuana (like marinol) to be developed.

*Pathos: the intro paragraph uses pathos to grab the attention of the reader and appeal to their hope.  If the reader thinks that there is no cure to their symptoms and the introduction appeals to the fact that they could be cured, this helps emphasize to them that this might be a paper worth reading.


*Logos- This appeals to the reader's logic.  If your kids will be more likely to use marijuana if it was legalized, it is logical that they would not want their children to abuse this substance, so they should try to develop a different form of the medicine.

*Ethos: Because of the citing of journal articles and certain government documents, the author gains credibility in the reader's eyes, and also by citing things from studies such as the Alaska evidence that was posted in the U.S. Drug Enforcement Administration report.

*Sufficient: I'm not sure that this argument is sufficient.  It seems like there needs to be more evidence on how marijuana actually leads to substance abuse. More research needs to support it.

*Accurate- This report is accurate in regards to the research provided because it comes from credible sources.


*Effective-  While this is effective in some parts, I think that their needs to be more addressing of the counterarguments and more evidence on how the easier access of marijuana leads to substance abuse.

Miracle Speech- Coach Herb Brooks

*Argument: What are the consequences of Coach Brooks speech on the USA Hockey Team's confidence?  Coach Brooks speech increases the USA Hockey team's confidence because Coach Brooks convinces them that they have the drive and skill to beat the Soviets. 

*Audience: 1980 Olympic USA hockey team.

*Goal: to influence players of the USA hockey team that they have it in them to beat the Soviets.

*Pathos: Coach Brooks largely appeals to the hockey players emotions.  He appeals to their pride by saying that they are the greatest hockey team in the world.  He also appeals to their sense of purpose and worth by saying talking about how they were destined to be on this team and that they were born to be hockey players.  By pointing out these strengths through appealing to their emotions, he increases their confidence to come out on top at the end of this game, even though everyone thinks the Soviets will win.

*Ethos: Coach Brooks also uses ethos to convince the hockey players in this speech.  Through out the movie Coach Brooks gained credibility as a coach in these players eyes.  He made them practice hard and at times gave them no mercy.  This shows them that he has their success in mind by making them practice so hard.  He has worked hard with them and they know that he knows their potential.

*Sufficient: This argument is sufficient.  By appealing to their emotions with his credibility and emphasizing that this is THEIR time, he convinces them that they are good enough to win this game, even if the Soviets might win 9 out of 10 games.  This argument is enough to motivate them to play hard enough to win this night.

*Accurate- Coach Brooks speech is accurate.  He hand picked these men to play on his team and has seen them work together as a team.  He sees in each of them the potential to beat the Soviets even though they are the underdogs going into this championship game.  He knows that his team can beat them if they work hard. 

*Effective- Coach Brooks speech is effective.  Not only are his words sufficient and motivating for the hockey players, but you can see the passion and belief in themselves in the boys eyes watching him.

"The Slave Ship" or "Slavers Throwing overboard the Dead and Dying—Typhoon coming on"

J.M.W. Turner

*Argument: What are the consequences of seeing the effects of slavery on the abolition campaign?  Seeing the effects of slavery increases the number of those recruited to the abolition campaign because seeing the effects of slavery increases the guilt/compassion people have.

*Audience: British citizens who don't know what's happening in the slave trade/those Joseph Turner wants to help in the abolition effort.

*Goal: to influence people to join the abolition campaign.

*Pathos: Because of the bodies of slaves and animals lying in the water dark colors, raging waves, and storm approaching on the left side of the painting, an ominous picture is painted that appeals to the viewer's fear and sadness. It also appeals to their sense of guilt because of all the death in the painting.

*Logos: This painting seems to say that it's logical to help stop slavery if people are being thrown off ships. If people are dying, someone needs to help them.

*Sufficient: The painting is not sufficient, unless the person viewing it is looking for detail due to the closeness the style is to impressionism.  The dead bodies in the foreground of the painting are hard to see unless one is looking really closely.  But the colors are sufficient in creating a gloomy mood.

*Accurate-  The actual event that this painting is based off of is when a captain of a ship  found out that his insurance only covered slaves lost at sea, so he threw them overboard.  It is not necessarily accurate to show that there was an intense storm approaching or that the sun was in the background during this event, but it adds to the effect and the pathos that Joseph Turner was trying to create.

*Effective- This is effective in motivating people to join in the abolition effort if they were paying attention to the fine details and the colors created in the painting. 

Commercial

 

In this commercial, Old Spice argues that Odor Blocker Body Wash eliminates BO.  The audience is boys from the age of about 12 (whenever they start using deoderant) to middle age men.  The goal is for men to buy this Old Spice body wash.  This commercial mainly uses Pathos to convince viewers to ultimately buy Old Spice's body wash through the use of appealing to humor.  The actor says that the body wash is so powerful in blocking BO that it can turn off the sun and also grow another sun.  While this information is obviously not accurate or relevant, it is what makes the commercial funny so its effective.  Another persuasive technique used is Ethos.  They use the very muscular Terry Crews, an actor and former NFL player, to represent Old Spice.  Because of his muscles and manliness, he gains credibility with his audience of boys who want to be like him.  Audience members think that if Terry Crews is that mainly and wears Old Spice body wash, I can be more manly by wearing it.  To quote a friend of mine who wears Old Spice, "I feel manlier when I wear it because of the ridiculously manly men that they use in their commercials."  Even though it may not be accurate that the product blocks BO for 16 hours, because the commercial is funny to this audience, many will be convinced to buy this body wash.